What do you think about these poems?? Be completely honest :)? - i can watch shows about blood but if i get cut i feel woozy
1) When we are together, nothing can go wrong,
What I can not explain why I used to say in a song.
Hold Me Tight and never let go
If you do not see Let Your Love.
Forget the pain you have ever felt
Take a look in your eyes melt Let It All.
Let your fingers join mine
From the hand that will be demonstrated fine.
Now I press my lips to yours,
We close our eyes, many doors opened.
With thin lips,
I know our love will last forever.
With every kiss and tell our stories,
They remain with us always to their age.
2) Shut Me Out, or let me in.
No matter what, I never win.
As you know,
Simple brilliance.
Never feel the pain inside,
The pain that I work so hard to hide.
Can not hear the call that,
So do not pretend that really cares.
How long should I wait
My whole life, to accept his fate?
I cut myself and see the blood,
Flows my body, causing a flood.
Cur rently I have been feeling better
But my faceIt is damp.
Tears flowing very fast,
But the pain inside will stop forever.
3) I am broken
Is there something wrong with me
You say I'm perfect
Do not let it snow
I have a disease
Deep inside
However, since I do not
The fear of hidden
The girl I am now
And the girl I used to
These are two different people
I am not even
Saturday, January 23, 2010
I Can Watch Shows About Blood But If I Get Cut I Feel Woozy What Do You Think About These Poems?? Be Completely Honest :)?
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Are you a songwriter in the grass? You can see that these words of a ballad or some sort of song. Flow very nice, I like the rhythm and rhyme seems so simple! Well, besides the three I would say that my favorite is the first ... It's very cute:]
ReplyDeleteMy least favorite would be) the third (written Naïve. But maybe I have a feeling that because it is shorter. You are really the first poem as the lyrics ... very nice!
I like all three. , As elsewhere, there are very deep, I like her. I will be honest with you. Somehow can not understand, really, really impressive, is not it? because if not, I have your name? I take this project and I have it there.
ReplyDeleteDG poems are really a lot like the lyrics (DG I think) have a great sound workflow Coz with di-n rhyiming Evry word sounds, the pain is all or protected by a kind of emotional depth.
ReplyDeletelovin the poem =)
It is a beautiful poem, I am more of his poems, can continue to write really was fantastic.
ReplyDeleteI think his poetry is very good. I like the first, but he should try to write poems that do not rhyme
ReplyDeleteand bueno!
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